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Creative Writing major hoping to make a living with words.
Writing tip blog for YA writers:
http://inkandquills.com/
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Kaitlin H Chloé Beaumont
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Kaitlin H Chloé Beaumont
mumbled "A blog for YA writers! "
Well hello Movellas! It's been a while. I've been away working hard on my new writing tip blog, and I would love it if you would give it a look over: http://inkandquills.com/
What do you think? :)5 years agoBrilliant blog!! :D It's so professional! I'm eagerly following its updates now! :D
- Wow. You have me hooked! You have a fantastic style and write very well! The story is very interesting so far and there's a lot of tension with Jay. I'm curious to know more, especially what she did to be made a Glacial. You definitely have a very promising future as a writer! Excellent work, can't wait to read more :)GlacialDreamless. Emotionless. Detached. Glacial. Violet has had her ability to feel emotions wiped from her, turning her into a Glacial. Any emotion she ever feels from now on will be the result of an injection...
- I just finished the prologue and the first chapter and I'm already hooked! I loved how the prologue started out all normal and then I was totally caught off guard and jarred by the girl with the creepy illness! Did not see that coming. I really like your writing style, you use a lot of sensory detail that made me feel like I was experiencing the story. At the end of chapter one where she's taking the girl back to her house, you should probably mention that's where she's going. I was a little confused at first but was able to figure it out. Great start, I'm curious to keep reading when I get a chance, especially after that cliffhanger in chapter 1 haha.NoplaceYou could have lived in London your whole life, every second breathing it's polluted air from the very second you were born to the day you stop breathing all together. Your entire rich history of ancestors...
- This is a great beginning! I love the idea of her being a notorious criminal, and I really like the name 'the Raven'--very mysterious. I also like how you start right at the action and the story gets going right away. You also do a good job of weaving in pieces to make us curious--what did she steal and why? How did she become a notorious thief? What is the moonstone? What's her real name? You make me want to keep reading and get the answers.
I do have one suggestion--your setting is a medieval-style fantasy, but your dialogue feels too modern. There's nothing technically "wrong" with it and you have some great lines (like the part where she demands his shirt, or when she tells him to go do his "apprenticing"), but I would consider tweaking the vernacular to match the time period. If you read a few YA novels set in a medieval time period you'll get a feel for that sort of dialogue.
I'm curious to find out what happens next! :)The RavenAs the country’s most wanted criminal, the Raven, has been terrorizing the king for years. Her latest mission to rescue Princess Rosaleen, unite the country, and over throw the cruel usurper king. However...
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