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22 year old biotechnology student ○ Proud achievements in my writing life so far: ○ Shortlisted for "User of the Year" in the 2014 Movellys ○ One of the winners for the Divergent Competition with my cover entry. ○ Runner up in the Valentine's Day 2014 competition with 'My Love'. ○ Shortlisted for the More Than This competition with 'The Fence'. ○ 2 short stories published in a local competition. ○ 'In Need of an Adventure' voted onto the World Book Day YA app and it was one of the first Papellas. ○ Silver in the Branching Competition/chapter 2 of 'In The Sky'. ○ First place in Billie the Dragon-Owl and bobsicle's Three Words Competition. ○ 'The Death of a Dragon Prince' nominated for Best Adventure Story in THE PAPER AWARDS by Mirlotta. ○ 'Free' featured in Mirlotta's movella 'HYPE'. ○ Runner up in the NaNoWriMo 2014 competition ○ Movellas Ambassador 2014-2016 ○ NaNoWriMo 2012, 2013 and 2014 winner and Camp NaNoWrimo 2013, 2014, 2016 and 2018 winner! :D my audiobooks: https://open.spotify.com/artist/6a5t8g79yDGK8TLDl9i29F

My Life with Anxiety

by , Monday October 10, 2016
 My Life with Anxiety

For World Mental Health Day (10th October)

I've been meaning to write this blog for a while and finally decided to publish today!

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  • White Ravens
    I love this idea! It's very unique and I've enjoyed what I've read so far! I would suggest a quick read over some parts of the story just to correct some spelling and grammar errors, but it's an intriguing start and your writing flows well :))
    Law of Everything
    Law of Everything
    Have you ever thought about a "law"?
    2 years ago
    Thank you for pointing it out
  • White Ravens

    mumbled "Random Movellas Flashback..."

    I was just thinking about an old comment I got on an old movella (which isn't up anymore since I abandoned the idea). The comment made me feel awful when I first read it. I was only young and thought the commentor was being really mean about my work and it made me cry. I left the comment for a day before coming back to it with a fresh head and realised that actually the commenter wasn't saying anything mean, but was giving constructive critism. The one bad thing she pointed out had overshadowed the good things she had pointed out and I had forgotten to pay attention to the good as well as the bad. The bad thing wasn't actually a bad thing either, but more she was just pointing out how I could improve my writing if I wished. Honestly, it was the best feedback I could've received.
    I went on to read more books and more movellas and realised that all the stories that I love and enjoy do what the commenter told me to improve on. Now, I am incredibly proud of how much my writing has improved since I was 14 and first started posting on here, and that's all because of comments from movellas and reading more movellas that helped sculpt my own writing style.
    I'd also like to point out that there is absolutely no need to listen to every comment you recieve. You know your own writing style and you can ignore any comments you don't agree with. It's important to understand other's points of view that read your stories, but also it's your work and you can write exactly what you want how ever you want so long as you are enjoying the story you are telling. I know I love recieving comment notifications from movellas and people comment on your work to let you know they are reading and want to encourage you to develop yourself and keep writing :))
    Just a really random thought I was having and felt like sharing XD Constructive critism is one of the best gifts for a writer in my opinion, but also encouragement and ensuring the writer knows they are good at what they do and to never give up something they love no matter what people say. Platforms like Movellas are such a great way to recieve this and I'm extremely lucky to have had so much time to develop my love for writing on here.
    Anyway, random thought train over. I'm not anyone special but just thought after my six years on movellas I would like everyone to keep writing if it's what you enjoy and to never stop as telling stories is such a great gift everyone should cherish :))

    Gosh that was a bit of a ramble!
    Katie Pharoah
    2 years ago
    You're totally right, constructive criticism is vital to the writer's journey. It's unfortunate that we don't see a lot of it compared to the early days of Movellas.
    The Intelligence Division
    Criticism is a very precise art form all in itself, and it's all too often underestimated. It's also really hard to find anywhere/anyone that even bothers to do it at all, let alone take it seriously. Nice comments on my work keep me working - 100% yes I like nice comments don't get me wrong - but constructive critiscism keeps me going *and* improving.
    I haven't published anything that I've been especially keen to get critiscism on in a while, but I trust that if I did, I'd be able to ask/trade critiscism with the people here, and they'd do a really good job of it.
  • White Ravens
    I hope you do get to continue this story I'm intrigued to see where it will be heading :)) Usually I'm not a fan of prologues as sometimes they slow the pace before the story has even started but I understand that your prologue sets the scene for the stories and explains the past information we need to know plus it sounds very professional and I like the style you wrote it in. Your words flow very well and you've chosen a very hard-hitting topic for this story with the metaphor for mental health you seem to be weaving, it's very clever (I'm unsure if that was your intention or not but that's what came to my mind anyway XD ). I would say there is a lot of telling and not showing in the first chapter. You could weave some of what the character is saying about their past into a conversation or even extend the story into having these scenes play out into short chapters, so perhaps have a chapter on the classroom where she finds out about her monster and then another on what they get up to in their apprenticeship (I hope this makes sense! XD ). For me, that would just add some action to the first chapter, but that's just my personal preference and you may have other plans for the story that means these parts can't be fleshed out I just thought I'd mention it in case you wanted to mix things up a little :)) I am definitely intrigued and hope you continue :))
    Then's Shadow
    Then's Shadow
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  • White Ravens
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    I just read the first few chapters and it's a great story so far! The start is really gripping, throwing us straight in with the action and raising questions to keep us reading the story for the answers. I know you said this is just a first draft, but when you edit reading aloud really helps me work out which sentences flow well and which don't. While reading, some sentences feel a little repetitive. For example you say sick rose in her throat twice close together, so you could mix it up a little there, but I can also see why you might leave it as that because of the repetitive theme of sickness so feel free to ignore me if that's what you were going for :P My favourite part is the first chapter with Red. Red. RED. - that really makes an impact! The conversations flow well between the two friends and I feel the main character's fear and shock in the first chapter :)) A really good start :D
    Claw Marks and Corridors
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    Lily Anna
    2 years ago
    Thank you very much. :)
    I know what you mean about the slight repetitiveness! I haven't managed to go back over and start editing properly yet but I will take your comments on board. I often make the same mistakes over and over again (like breathe instead of breath) xD But I will hopefully get the motivation to fix those errors at some point.
    Thanks again for reading and commenting! :) And I hope if you continue reading you enjoy it.
    White Ravens
    2 years ago
    1 Like
    I do it all the time! The amount of times I go back to editing and ask myself why have I just written the same thing three times in three consecutive paragraphs XD Editing is a right pain to try and get yourself motivated for :P I will read some more soon :))
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